My edited version is found at the bottom of this post. I include your original for reference. As you can see, most of my edits have been to remove things that I thought could be removed and still leave the main thrust of your letter intact. All edits have been for style only, except for one. I deleted the line about asking Jacque Fresco to come on the show. It does nothing to make someone feel special to say "We asked these other people as well". The recipient may start to feel like they are receiving a mass-mailing. So I got rid of that line for strategic reasons. The rest is only edits for style.
I'm collaborating with Lauren to see if we can perfect a letter here is my rough draft to Spielberg with my version alone first.
Dear Mr. Spielberg,
Ever since I saw your film AI I realized that you clearly have an interest in a field that many of us at our organization, imminst.org, also have a vested interest in, which is, if and when artificial intelligence could bring about what some now call a technological Singularity. That is a further out concept but we could use your expertise in something more managable today, which is defeating the aging process in humans.
I'm writing to you on behalf of our charitable organization imminst.org which focuses on research and advocacy into unlimited lifespans, or to put simply, anti-aging technologies that will allow us to live 50, 100, even hundreds of years more than we currently do.
We here at imminst, help with issuing research grants as well as help with gathering a pool of scientists and other thinkers together in close nit communities all working on the conquest of defeating aging. In light of this I have sent out out book called SCOD.
Our biggest task, perhaps, is not the complexity of the technicalities of defeating death. It is helping people to understand that it is an achievable goal, and worth pursuing.
I'm writing this letter in hopes of interesting you in this cause of all causes. You may have heard of Dr. Aubrey De Grey and his SENS Foundation which is working on defeating the aging process from a unique engineering perspective. Aubrey De Grey has been featured with Dr. Sanjay Gupta on a half hour CNN spot focusing on pro-longevity as well as several other mainstream programs, and is a rising star who we believe could lead the way to defeating the aging process in humans.
We also want to invite you to be interviewed on our small, but growing show, the Sunday Evening Update. It includes news and views on the world of life extension. We have had many bigger name entrepreneurs, thinkers, inventors and the like on in the show in the past. You may have heard of Drs.Terry Gross man and Ronald Klatz for example. We have recently gotten in touch with futurist and social engineer Jacque Fresco about doing the show.
Some questions we might ask you on the show include: Do you consider life extension as a key area of concern for humanities welfare? What do you think of artifical intelligence bringing on a technological singularity? And many more questions.
You can, of course reach me at,
(David Styles address)
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Dear Mr. Spielberg,
When I saw your film "AI", I realized that you clearly have an interest in a field in which our organization - The Immortality Institute - also has a vested interest: if and when artificial intelligence could bring about what some now call a technological Singularity. That is a distant concept but we could use your expertise in something more managable today, which is defeating the aging process in humans.
I'm writing to you on behalf of our charitable organization, which focuses on research and advocacy into anti-aging technologies that will allow us to live 50, 100, or even hundreds of years more than we currently do.
We here at ImmInst help with issuing research grants as well as gathering a pool of scientists and other thinkers together on the conquest of aging. In light of this I have sent you a copy of our book, "The Scientific Conquest Of Death".
Our biggest task, perhaps, is not the the technicalities of defeating death. It is helping people to understand that it is an achievable goal and worth pursuing.
I'm writing this letter in hopes of interesting you in this cause of all causes. You may have heard of Dr. Aubrey de Grey and his SENS Foundation which is working on defeating the aging process from a unique engineering perspective. Dr. de Grey has been featured with Dr. Sanjay Gupta from MIT on a half hour CNN spot focusing on pro-longevity as well as several other mainstream programs, and is a rising star who we believe could lead the way to defeating the aging process in humans.
We also want to invite you to be interviewed on our small but growing show, the Sunday Evening Update. It includes news and views on the world of life extension. We have had many bigger name entrepreneurs, thinkers, inventors and the like on in the show in the past. You may have heard of Drs. Terry Grossman and Ronald Klatz, for example.
Some questions we might ask you on the show include: Do you consider life extension as a key area of concern for humanities welfare? What do you think of artifical intelligence bringing on a technological singularity? Of course there are a number avenues down which this could be taken.
We'd love to take this further with you. Should you be amenable to this, you can reach me at the above contact details.
Eternally,
David Styles
Immortality Institute
Edited by David Styles, 23 January 2010 - 11:34 PM.